66 Breaths of Barstow for Babs

talk
desert
deepens day
drifts
west
cool
prose
sand
morn
crossroads
family
1957
trunk
$300 bra-pinned
Route
66
Los Angeles cures
ocean
butterfly
tomato
sunrise
donkey birds emerge
cowboy hat floats salt sweet
evening hills
angel hovers
sky metallic blue
orange
sea falls ten-pound raindrops
children embrace
across country blows highway
tumbleweed
train side
winds
south
distance
silver
water
ardor breeze

10 Comments Add yours

    1. Joe Linker says:

      Thx, Bill. Glad my fall on the concrete came up bouncing.

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  1. Lovely how the pauses and silences make space for evocative scenes, stories.

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    1. Joe Linker says:

      There are enough stories there to fill a novel. Steinbeck wrote one.

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  2. Very evocative! The space between words allows for all sorts of associations to emerge, and the words themselves have more weight, like pebbles dropped into a pool.

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  3. Babs says:

    Autumn
    leaves
    f
    a
    l
    l
    red
    brown
    yellow
    children
    r u n
    through
    s
    c a t
    t e d
    e r
    leaves
    wait
    for the rake
    winds
    b l o w
    dad
    runs with
    the rake
    children h
    i
    d
    e
    mom brings hot
    chocolate
    children peek
    out
    S… L… O… W… L… Y…
    come
    out
    come
    out
    wherever
    you are

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    1. Joe Linker says:

      Hey, Barb. Thanks for reading and comment poem. WordPress is converting the Excel format to regular text. It’s still directional, but it lost its concrete poem quality of the original. It shows up ok when pasted, but then it goes back to default when published. There’s not a pre-format option in the comment boxes. Still, it’s a fun poem, even if it lost all your hard work on the concrete poem structure!

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      1. Babs says:

        You are correct! No matter, I had fun creating it! I think I like this concrete poem structure. I read your articles and they were interesting. I will try to do more. thanks for your comment.

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  4. Debby says:

    I miss your poetry Joe!

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    1. Joe Linker says:

      Hey, Debby. Hope all’s well. Poetry everywhere. It’s raining poems. Need umbrella.

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